主题：请教各位英语达人儿童诗翻译Now we are six -- 国林风
家园 请教各位英语达人儿童诗翻译Now we are six When I was One, 当我一岁时
I had just begun. 我是花骨朵
When I was Two, 当我两岁时
I was nearly new. 我是蚕宝宝
When I was Three 当我三岁时
I was hardly me. 我还不是小蝴蝶
When I was Four, 当我四岁时
I was not much more. 我变，我变，我变变变
When I was Five, I was just live. 当我五岁时，我变成孙猴子啦
But now I am Six, I'm as clever as lever, 现在我6岁了，我像齐天大圣一样聪明
So I think I'll be six now for ever and ever 所以我一直要当六小龄童
一个朋友的娃元旦汇演，表演英语诗朗诵，想英语念完画蛇添足翻译一下，不求特别信达雅，但求有趣。表演娃是6岁男孩。
我胡乱翻译了一下，对最后一句特别不满意。各位达人对整个翻译有没有更好地建议？
先谢过了！
通宝推：epimetheus,家园 这哪是翻译啊，明摆着是创作嘛，鬼子的高大上形象就是这么给 造出来滴。。。
如果觉得英文太直白不过瘾，干脆把你创作的这个翻译成英文给娃背得了。。。。
家园 尝试一下符合原意的 When I was One, 一岁我小小，
I had just begun. 走路老摔交。
When I was Two, 两岁话少少，
I was nearly new. 只会瞎胡叫。
When I was Three 三岁个不高，
I was hardly me. 还要妈妈抱。
When I was Four, 四岁常发烧，
I was not much more. 因为总感冒。
When I was Five, 五岁没头脑，
I was just live. 啥也不知道。
But now I am Six, 今年我六岁，
I'm as clever as clever 聪明不得了。
So I think I'll be six now 六岁你真好，
for ever and ever 六岁你别跑！
通宝推：刹那芳华,不远攸高,家园 我以后就当六岁的小猴子啦 家园 所以我要永远当六岁的小猴子 家园 直译的话会把六岁以下和以上的孩子全都得罪光了 一岁才起步，
两岁新宝宝，
三岁还懵懂，
四岁木有进步，
五岁刚开始活着，
六岁了，
我聪明得都不像啥了，
我要现在、一直、永远都六岁。
家园 有个网友翻译的诗经体 When I was One,
吾成初岁
I had just begun.
性始蒙开
When I was Two,
及于二载
I was nearly new.
新禾未艾
When I was Three
三秋忽转
I was hardly me.
弗再故我
When I was Four,
四载之行
I was not much more.
才情已没
When I was Five, I was just alive.
五岁既来，苟活于世
But now I am Six, I'm as clever as clever,
六龄殊众，且颖且聪
So I think I'll be six now for ever and ever
余喜斯年，循此终生
通宝推：刹那芳华,NoName,
家园 翻译成中文，中文的习惯可能更好 初度始懵董
孩提学语迟
垂髫骑竹马
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