主题：俺的英文履历书，求河里大侠指教，十万火急！！ -- simplyred

俺的英文履历书，明天就要发出去，第一次写，可定有不足之处，求大侠指教。

purchaser

Area Vendor Manager

Crane Engineer

Hydraulic/Electric Designers

Mechanical Designers

Service Engineers Apply before:

Japan

基本上就这几个，购买可能还有销售和企画，说明会上发的一张简介掉了，后来打电话问了差不多就这些。俺经营工学背景，求的便是这些purchase avm文科的东东。

下面是简历，人名住址省略。请大侠们看看有没有错别字和文法错误，还有请问我写的这个Purchase affairs or business development position可以cover公司的求人范围吗？

OBJECTIVE:

Purchase affairs or business development position where my academic knowledge, cross-cultural experiences, team facilitation, enthusiasm, language skills, and advanced technical skills will be continually challenged.

SKILLS:

 Well-conceived

 Work well with a multi-cultural and diverse work force

 Eager to learn and build upon my knowledge and experiences

 Achievement-oriented, ambitious, and adaptable

 Innovative and resourceful

 Ability to prioritize and meet deadlines

 Effective in a team environment as well as with minimum supervision

 Proficient in Windows (OS, Word, Excel, PowerPoint, )

 Trilingual-Japanese, Chinese, English(be used mainly in academic research and translate, and now study for TOEIC test)

EDUCATION:

Apri.2005 to Mar.2007　 。。。。 University, 　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　Cumulative GPA: 3.8　　　　　　

Apri.2001 to Mar.2005 。。。。, Bachelor of Commerce - Major in Management　　　　　　　　　Cumulative GPA: 3.3

RELATED WORK EXPERIENCE:

还在想，主要是强调在学校TA和在NHK新闻部工作的经历

respond quickly to emergencies　 deal with emergency situations　ability to respond appropriately in emergency situations

HONORS&AWARDS

 Presentation of master's thesis in Japan Industrial Management Association Tuohoku Branch Meeting For Research Papers 2007

 MEXT(Ministry of Education, Culture, Sports, Science, and Technology) Honors Scholarship 2004 and 2006

REFERENCES:

Available upon request

这里说的是美国规矩，其他地方可能有所不同。

1。不叫purchaser, 一般级别从低到高，叫purchasing agent/supervisor/coordinator/manager/director，或者叫buyer或者merchandise manager，contract manager。

也有叫procurement manager/agent/specialist的。

2。Purchase affairs很怪，建议改成purchasing就好。 procurement也可以，看具体干什么了。

3。objective太罗索，语法也有问题。简单点“challenging and rewarding position ”之类就可以了。

4。人品不是技能。你的skills单子里两者都有，要分开，突出真正的skills，比如计算机和语言技能。人品类可以单列成“summary of qualifications”，紧跟在objective之后。

5。work experience里要突出具体做过的工作责任和参加g的项目，注意突出写获得的具体成就，而不是简单的人品自吹又来一遍。

6。如果相关，可以在教育部分写出硕士论文题目，以突出你在相关领域背景的深度。

问题：

求职的对象是跨国公司，是否有必要把Work well with a multi-cultural and diverse work force，语言等几条重要项目改成黑字体使之更加显眼一些好呢？

OBJECTIVE:

Purchasing or business development position where my academic knowledge, cross-cultural experiences, team facilitation, language skills, and advanced technical skills will be continually challenged.

SUMMARY OF QUALIFICATIONS:

 Well-conceived

 Work well with a multi-cultural and diverse work force

 Eager to learn and build upon my knowledge and experiences

 Achievement-oriented, ambitious, and adaptable

 Innovative and resourceful

 Ability to prioritize and meet deadlines

 Effective in a team environment as well as with minimum supervision

SKILLS:

 Proficient in Windows (OS, Word, Excel, PowerPoint)

 Trilingual - Japanese (Japanese Language Proficiency Test Level 1 2000 & 2001)

Chinese (Mandarin, native)

English (Be used mainly in academic research. Have attended a special class in English, and now studying for TOEIC test.)

EDUCATION:

Apri.2005 to Mar.2007　 。。。。。 University, Master of Arts in Economics- Major in logistics　　　　　　　　　　　　　Cumulative GPA: 3.8　　　　　　

Apri.2001 to Mar.2005 。。。。 University, Bachelor of Arts in Economics - Major in Management　　　　　　Cumulative GPA: 3.3

RELATED WORK EXPERIENCE:

NHK: News Coverage (Mar. 2005 to Apri. 2007, 。。。。city, Japan)

 Respond appropriately in 。。。。 Gov. corruption scandal and other emergency situations.

 Ability to deal with personnel at all levels effectively.

 Assisted in news coverage, with particular emphasis on recording and lighting.

。。。。。 University: Teaching Assistant (Mar. 2005 to Apri. 2006, 。。。。。。city, Japan)

 Assisted in lectures on information processing.

 Skillful in operating Word, Excel and Power Point.

HONORS & AWARDS:

 Presentation of master's thesis in Japan Industrial Management Association Touhoku Branch Meeting For Research Papers 2007

 MEXT(Ministry of Education, Culture, Sports, Science, and Technology) Honors Scholarship 2004 & 2006

REFERENCES:

Available upon request

首先，简历这东东向来要报喜不报忧，能提过五关斩六将就不要提走麦城这一茬，没谁喜欢说自己曾经被卷入到某政府腐败丑闻之中...

更何况Respond appropriately更是作人的本分，无甚可夸耀之处 -- 难道还能respond inappropriately不成?

工作经验一定要具体... 不要听那些什么“简历一定得一页之内”的说法... 如果你有内容可写就尽情地写开好了...

怎么能强到头条啊。俺们可是24小时追踪哦

另外老大，俺这是刚毕业啊，能写这么多都是呕心沥血了。。。

给老外写，度的把握对我们中国人来说有些难。我们不爱吹呀。所以我开始时总觉得怪怪的，后来想开了，我本来就这么牛么，没吹多大。

另一个，最好有详细有突出。一页之内是对的，意思是一页要说明白。但是不妨碍多两页详细说明。

then we can say something about your resume.

职位前面已经写了

purchaser

Area Vendor Manager

Crane Engineer

Hydraulic/Electric Designers

Mechanical Designers

Service Engineers Apply before:

Japan

you really need to focus on your TRUE skills, not fluffy stuffs such as multi-cultural, diverse environment, effective communication, strategic thinking, team work spirit, result-oriented, can-do mentality, great attention to detail, blah blah blah.

Tri-lingual is definitely a skill when you’re applying to a multi-national organization, so this may stay. A lot of others must go. They should go into your interviews (I bet you know the two minute brief). They could also go into your Thank You email or follow-up email, or even cover letter, depending on situations. But never on your resume!

Resume should only carry key words that can “cheat” the scanning process a lot of companies have in place, so it can move on to a real person (recruiters in HR) or attract special attention. Stuffs like C++, SAS, SQL, Hyperion, CrystalBall, financial modeling, statistical modeling are what I call TRUE skills and key words. Any professional certifications you’re holding are also reflections of your skills, such as CPA, CFA, PMP.

We all know we need to sell ourselves, but don't over-kill. I wouldn’t put too many words around something as basic as Word, Excel, and PowerPoint. I wouldn’t even mention something like “responding to emergency appropriately”, as this is really the very basic quality people expect from you. When selling yourself, only pick stuffs that can really differentiate yourself from others. Also try to be specific. Give facts --- your accomplishments --- not your self evaluation or bragging. In stead of saying “respond appropriately” you can list an experience that you effectively brought a situation under control and resolved crisis.

To sum up, you resume should only include skills and accomplishments. Your accomplishments will speak for you all those softer or fluffier qualities you possess.

What type of job are you applying for? It looks like you had mechanical engineering background / experience but you were also a journalist? And you're applying for a procurement job?

As others pointed out, do not use 'purchaser'. I wouldn't use 'buyer', either. The common title here in the States is ‘procurement manager’, ‘purchasing manager’, or ‘procurement specialist / analyst’, ‘supply management specialist / analyst’.

This is the reason why I ask you to post your job requirement first. Anyway, you can keep on working on your resume. You may have to prepare different resumes for companies/countries.

俺是新毕业的。在NHK干的是兼职啊，而且主要做的是 recording and lighting.

写这个主要是强调有在大公司并且跨文化的环境下工作的经验。NHK你把她想成bbc或者cctv就容易理解了。

做好事有好报啊。